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[Aug. 10th, 2004|03:14 pm]
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kvschwartz
2004-08-10 12:56 (link) Select
I'm going to make some very very general suggestions Take them or leave them.

1) Unless you are going for some sort of E. E. Cummings effect, don't lowercase your eyes.

2) Always check your spelling. Spell-check loves being used. It gives it a sense of purpose.

3) Avoid cliched images and expressions.

4) Avoid unspecified prepositions.

5) Embrace your nouns and verbs. They are the skeleton and flesh of poetry.

6) Narrate less. Don't tell the audience what you feel or what they should feel. Instead, think up tactile imagery.

7) Revise, revise, revise. It's human nature to think in cliches, to do what's been done before, to say things that have already been said. The task of a poet (or any writer, really) is to get past that and invent new expressions.

So don't write about bottomless pits if you can write about soap-lined sinks, don't write about aching hearts if you can write the feel of a thumb prodding your celiac plexus, don't write about changing the world if you can write about that time you vomited on your brother's new Nikes that time you had appendicitis.

8) Always be open to criticism, but **never take that criticism as the Word of G-d**.

Best of luck.




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[User Picture]From: plushii
2004-08-10 09:35 pm (UTC)
Your poetry is fine just the way it is, babybaby. That's why you've been PUBLISHED what, TWICE now? Don't let somebody who doesn't know what the hell they're talking about get to you. You might not have "rose above the cliche", but you did a brilliant fucking job of expressing it, and people should enjoy it for the quality. If they can't, then obviously they're lacking in the artistic field. And remember, Manda. This is coming from a writer, so don't fret.

You write the best poetry I've ever read.

--Mandie.
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